Post #205 March 2 2020

“Editing Your Own Work…It’s Like Flossing Your Teeth”

Recently I finished the first draft of Forbidden City, the third episode in my new series Quantum Troopers Return.  Now it’s time to review and edit my own work…something akin to flossing your teeth.

The story came in at about 65 pages.  That surprised me a bit, from the outline.  I thought it might be closer to 45-50 pages.  I’m trying to run these episodes at about 40-60 pages, averaging about 50.

First order of business in editing your own work: take off the rose-colored glasses.  You have to learn to read the story like a first time reader and be ruthless with your precious words and delicious turns of phrase.

Ask yourself this:

1. Does the story flow?  Does it move along?  Why or why not?  Maybe you linger too long describing some place or scene.  Cut out useless descriptions and get the story going again.  What happens next?  In all my stories in QTR, I wanted to have a lot of action.
2. Are you interested in knowing more about the main character(s) and finding out what happens to them?  If so, great.  Keep going.  If not, why not?  Maybe the reader needs to know a little more background about these people…a brief flashback.  Why do they act this way?  Was it a drunken father who abandoned the family?  Was it the death of a brother?  A sadistic math teacher?  Lay this on thinly but it might give your character more to hook readers.
3. Do the twists and turns of the plot surprise you?  As the author, real surprise in the story may be hard to achieve.  But take a reader’s point of view, if you can.  Surprises and unexpected plot twists can really grab a reader if done right.
    
   Of course, it stands to reason that you’ll always be correcting misspelling, awkward phrases, etc as you read.  And please do Spellcheck at the end, because you’ll never catch everything.  Sometimes, when doing Spellcheck, I find myself intentionally leaving a misspelled word for a reason and that’s okay.  Just make sure you have a story-telling reason to do that. 
    
   One of the challenges of writing and editing this series is the fact that it is a series.  I’m somewhat constrained by what has gone before.  I’m trying to make sure the story stands on its own as a story, but I don’t want to explain or recapitulate everything done in the previous two episodes (Quantum Troopers Return is a continuation of the original series Quantum Troopers).  It’s a juggling act.
    
   Another challenge to authoring a series is making sure to wrap up all the loose ends of the plot in the final tale.  To do that, you sort of have to keep score.  In my final story in Tales of the Quantum Corps, I had additional challenges in that my main character, Johnny Winger, had actually changed physical form and is not a normal human being like you and me, but rather a swarm of nanoscale robots configured to resemble a human being…or anything else he wants.  It’s been fun and hard work to imagine what life would be like living this way.  Somehow, in this final story, I had to convey what life is like as an angel (my term for a para-human swarm entity), advance the story of what happens with this as a key fact, and close out the story of what happens to him in the end. 
    
   In my review and editing, I’m trying to be as critical as possible as to whether I have achieved these ends.  I’m finding that I may need to add more to the story to bring this character, who has been a continuing character, to life in all of his predicaments.   I want the end to be a satisfying conclusion to all the adventures Johnny Winger has gone through before and perhaps even to show some change or growth in Winger as a result.
    
   The Muse.com has some good tips on editing your own work.  Here are five (from Caroline McMillan):
    

1. Print out your work (this helps simulate a fresh or ‘outsider’ perspective, which should help you edit)
2. Take a break (put some emotional distance between creating words and editing them)
3. Read it out loud (this is a really good idea)
4. Pretend you’re the audience (already covered above)
5. Be ruthless (ditto)
    
   On first read of Forbidden City: Episode 3, I have a little more work to do.  That’s normal.  That’s why we edit. 
    
   With any luck, I’ll be done by the end of February and you can look for this story to be uploaded to Smashwords.com and other fine ebook retailers in April 2020.
    
   The next post to The Word Shed comes on March 9.

      Phil B.

 

Post #204 February 24 2020

“Pricing Your Work in Today’s Market”

The year 2020 has proven to be an interesting year for me as an online author.  Last year, with all my works available through Smashwords and other fine ebook retailers set to free, my total net downloads were 24,042.  Not bad for a relative unknown.  This year, I have continued to maintain all titles that have been free as free downloads.  Seems only fair.

However, I have been persuaded by some of my writer friends to start putting prices on my new work.  I uploaded the first ‘priced’ title on February 7.  The price is set to $0.99…in other words ninety-nine cents.  The title is Quantum Troopers Return Episode 1: Fab Lords and it is episode 1 of a proposed 10-episode series for this year.

Total downloads for all titles in 2020 so far? 1020.  Total downloads for my one priced title?  A grand total of two.  That’s right.  2.

Aside from the obvious fact that people don’t want to pay for something they think they can get for free, what causes this buying behavior?  More particularly, why put a price now on my work?  Some thoughts….

1.  Many friends (including some writer friends) have told me I have the download numbers to justify pricing at least my new work.  I happen to agree.  The numbers are what they are.
2. Writing stories is hard work.  If you don’t think so, try it.  In my case, some of my work are multiple episodes of a series, with a public upload schedule that I am loath to ignore.  So, there’s time pressure.
3. Readers value what they download more when there’s a price.  I feel that way when I pay $30 for a hardcover book, which admittedly isn’t often these days.  If they really want to read the work, they’ll buy it.  Which leads me to this…
4. Do they really want to read my work?  Judging from the response to the one priced title, I’d have to say, no…not really.  But then how to explain the 24,000 downloads last year?

When I first joined the Smashwords community, I did have prices on my initial uploaded work.  Downloads were respectable but eventually plateaued off.  I checked with Smashwords for recommendations on how to boost your downloads and one of their recommendations was to lower the price or try setting your work to free, just to see what happens.  So, I did that.

Lo and behold, my downloads took off.  Really spiked and they’ve stayed high ever since.  Why did I keep setting my uploads to free?  I told myself I was trying to build a readership and since I was an unknown author, when you uploaded my work and it was free, you really weren’t taking much of a chance.  My total downloads since I went online with Smashwords and other retailers is now at 43,656.  Other things I’m doing to connect with potential readers is writing and hosting this Word Shed blog.

So that is the situation today.  I’m keeping all titles that have been free before free for now.  New titles that I upload this year will have a price, something between 99 cents and $1.99 or thereabouts.  I’m confident enough of my work and my small readership to feel that I can encourage downloads even of titles with prices.  And as Smashwords always reminds their authors, write the best damn book you can and don’t upload it until you’ve made it your best work. 

I’ll keep you posted on further developments in this area.  In the meantime, many thanks to the 2 brave downloaders who paid 99 cents each for Quantum Troopers Return: Episode 1: Fab Lords.  My payout from this is now up to $1.12.

The next post to The Word Shed comes on March 2, 2020.  See you then.

Phil B.

 

Post #203 February 17, 2020

“Why Johnny Winger isn’t Tom Swift Jr...But Maybe Should Have Been”

For many years, I have been working with a continuing character I created for three different series, Tales of the Quantum Corps, Quantum Troopers and Quantum Troopers Return.

His name is Johnny Winger.  Although I have consciously patterned these series stories after the Tom Swift Jr. books, Tom Swift is not Johnny Winger…but maybe he should have been.

Serial characters are both fun and a challenge to write.  Over the course of the series, you want to see them grow and evolve, confront problems and overcome them.  You want your reader to identify with them and like an old flannel shirt, become comfortable with all their idiosyncracies and nuances.  Think James Bond, Captain Kirk and Spock, Jason Bourne, Harry Potter and so on.  Just the mention of a well-known series character can evoke all kind of memories and expectations.  Building a series character is like building a brand name.  Readers like that because they know what they’re getting when they buy a book.

Think about Tom Swift Jr and what comes to mind?  An eternal teen-ager.  A boy genius who never ages.  An inventor of some cool and some rather ridiculous inventions.  An adventurer who’s always up to his armpits in problems with devious foreign governments, wicked crooks, space beings, you name it.  Tom Swift Jr, as written in the series, is the quintessential, blond, crew-cut all-American boy.  Well raised, courteous, respects his elders, tries to do the right thing.  I could almost imagine him as an altar boy or acolyte at a medium-sized Methodist church.

Jeff Duntemann has written a background study of Tom Swift in his Tom Swift Jr:  An Appreciation: To wit:

Tom Swift was perpetually eighteen, an age far enough removed from where my nerd friends and I were to be beyond understanding, but close enough for us to think we might just get there someday. He didn't seem to go to school, and there was no indication as to how he learned all he knew. Hey, he was a genius. My friend Larry could play any song he heard on the piano, immediately, with both hands—and had never taken a single lesson. He was just born with it. So, apparently, was Tom Swift.

None of that bothered us at all. Similarly, it was no bother that Tom Swift as a character was almost completely devoid of distinguishing personality traits. He was brilliant, strong, patriotic, hard-working, and respected his parents—and beyond that was as featureless as a billiard ball. In one sense that was because Tom Swift was a sort of Halloween costume that we donned in our imaginations, and any specifics that clashed too strongly with our specifics might have made this identification difficult. (I had this problem with numerous other characters in later SF, which made me more a spectator than a participant in the action.) Grosset & Dunlap knew what they were selling, and it wasn't literature.

I did consciously have Tom Swift Jr. in mind (or at least his adventures) when I created Johnny Winger but there are some notable differences in their personas.

Winger has undergone personal tragedy in his young life, in the death of his Mom and the depression of his Dad.  We don’t know what Tom Swift did before the stories; Grossett and Dunlap writers never tell us.  Tom Swift Jr inherits his father’s business (Swift Enterprises) and apparently his genius and plucky approach to life.  Johnny Winger joins Quantum Corps to get away from his life and live a different way.

In my series, Johnny Winger is in military service, with all that implies.  Tom Swift is a civilian, though he has close relations with various government departments.  Johnny Winger is no genius inventor, but he does have latent and initially unrealized skills as an atomgrabber, which makes him a special commodity to his superiors at Quantum Corps.   It also gets him into trouble at times.  Plus, throughout the series, Johnny Winger sometimes imbues his nanobotic devices with personalities and qualities he can’t seem to find in his human relations. 

In my series, I have endeavored to have Winger grow in his responsibilities.  The reader can see Winger progress in the ranks from a Lieutenant right out of nog school all the way to a flag officer, a General and Commander-in-Chief of Quantum Corps  (CINCQUANT).  At the end, he even allows himself to be deconstructed  into a para-human swarm entity (aka, an angel) to better fight off the evil criminal cartel Red Hammer (later Red Harmony) and their otherworldly benefactors.  Tom Swift never did that.

Have I shown any other changes, growth or evolution in Johnny Winger?  Well, I tried.  He gets married, to another quantum trooper.  They have kids.  He loses his wife to a religious cult called the Church of Assimilation.   But like the creators of Tom Swift, I never let Winger’s need to grow get in the way of the story.  At least, he doesn’t remain eighteen years old forever.

One challenge of creating and using a continuing series character is having to write around the facts of what you have written before.  That can be both a challenge and an impediment.  You find yourself reading and re-reading earlier writing to keep up with what you’ve already said.  If nothing else, you want your series character to be consistent across the stories…readers will give up quickly on your stories if you’re not.  Ian Fleming always took pains to portray James Bond as essentially the same person from story to story…shaken but not stirred.  And we readers found some comfort in that. 

Johnny Winger is not Tom Swift because their backgrounds and their story environments are completely different.  But I did often have Tom in my mind as I drew up adventures and problems for Johnny to face.  What happened to Johnny Winger often happens to characters that authors create…he took on a life of his own and drove the stories in unexpected directions.

And that’s not a bad thing.

The next post to The Word Shed comes on February 24, 2020.

See you then.

Phil B.

Post #202 February 10, 2020

“He Said What?  Effective Dialogue for a Good Story”

 

Every writer of fiction, every story-teller, must deal with fictional dialogue.  Writing dialogue is a true art.  That’s because dialogue has to serve many masters in any story.

Here’s snatch of dialogue that opens my sf novel The Farpool, from the very first page…

 

Angie Gilliam squirmed a bit more but it was no use.  Something sharp was pinching her butt.  The weight of Chase Meyer on top of her made it hurt like crazy. 

“Ouch…that hurts like hell…what the hell are you doing?”

“Sorry…just trying to…it’s the Cove.  Water’s choppy today—“

Angie twisted and contorted herself to ease the pressure.  That was better.

“Maybe this wasn’t such a great idea, huh?”

They had packed a meal and grabbed a boat from Turtle Key Surf and Board—that was Mack Meyer’s shop, Chase’s Dad.  They had puttered along the coast off Shelley Beach until they came to Half Moon Cove—they always did it in Half Moon Cove—and found a secluded spot a few dozen meters off shore…right under some cypress trees.  Always smelled great there.

Then Chase and Angie wolfed down their sandwiches, dialed up the right music on Chase’s wristpad so they could slam some jam properly and settled down to business.

That’s when the wind fetched up and the Cove got way choppier than it usually did.  Most of the time, you could lay a place setting on top of the water and have dinner like home, it was so placid.  But not today.

“Ouch…look…let’s give it a rest, okay…something’s not quite right…”

Chase groaned and pulled out of her, cinching up his shorts as he did so.  He lay back against the side of the boat, and turned the volume down on his pad…whoever it was screeching on that go-tone needed a few more lessons.  He checked the growing waves beyond the Cove and that’s when he spied the waterspout.

“Jeez…look at that!” 

Angie pulled up her own shorts, ran fingers through her dark brown page-boy hair and sucked in a breath.

“Wow---that’s so wicked--“

There was a strange, wave-like agitation on the horizon just beyond the Cove, maybe a few kilometers out to sea, past Shell Key, easily.  For a few moments, a slender multi-hued waterspout danced just above the waves, like a gray-green rope writhing and hissing on the horizon.  It only lasted a few moments, then it collapsed.  There was a calm period, then the ocean began seething again and became more agitated than before.  Waves piled into the Cove, nearly upending the little boat.  Before long, another spout had formed, all in an odd sort of rhythm. 

 

In the dialogue above, notice that I’ve thrown in some colloquial sounding words, some slang, chopped it up a bit, yet you can tell what’s going on and how the characters feel about what’s going on.

Okay, so what’s going on here?  Dialogue serves many purposes…

1. Dialogue has to sound real, without being real.

Think about the speech you hear around you all the time.  It’s filled with ums, uhs, fits and starts and circuitous, poorly constructed, often grammatically incorrect sentences.  That’s the way real people talk…in any language.  Dialogue has to sound like that, without actually being like that.  That’s why it’s an art.  A few selected ums and ahs goes a long way in fictional dialogue.  It leads the reader’s inner ear to hear something that sounds real but it also performs other fictional duties as well.

     2. Dialogue has to advance the story.

Look again at the passage above.  What do you know about the story: two lovers are getting it on in a canoe in some kind of cove.  Their little tryst isn’t turning out so well, so they stop.  They see a water spout.  The ocean starts heaving.  Strange things are happening.  All this on one page.  All dialogue has to do something to move the story along and it has to do this through the words of the characters.  They see and experience things.  They report and comment on what they see or hear or experience.  They respond verbally to what’s happening: “…ouch, that hurts, stop doing that….”  The reader lives vicariously through the characters so dialogue is really important….it has to sound real.  You want the reader to empathize with your characters.  Dialogue helps make the connection.

      3. Dialogue has to reveal character and convey feelings and emotions.

There are ways other than dialogue to do this, narrative ways.  The writer could just say: “Jane felt sad and wished the pain would stop.”  But in general, it’s always better to show rather than tell.  Show Jane reacting in a way that conveys sadness.  “Tears flowed down Jane’s cheeks and she sighed, ‘I wish I was dead…I can’t take this anymore.’”  This reads a lot more powerfully and dramatic.  The dialogue, when done well, puts the reader in the character’s shoes and practically compels sympathy, empathy, all those things a writer or story-teller wants.  Now we want to know more about why Jane wishes she were dead, what’s driven her to this point.  Hopefully, the writer and the story will reveal that.  Done well, dialogue can really establish a strong emotional bond between fictional characters and the reader.

Fictional dialogue carries a lot of weight.  It’s not easy to do well.  You don’t normally talk in stilted, formal phrases (unless the story requires it) so your characters shouldn’t either.  Write dialogue like you talk and like you hear other people talking.  Then clean it up a little and bend it to the story’s needs.  As for me, whenever I hear a particularly colorful word or phrase, I write it down.  Usually it’ll turn up somewhere later in a story.

The next post to The Word Shed comes on February 17.  

See you then.

Phil B.

Post #201 February 3, 2020

“Grabbing the Reader’s Attention Right Away”

The first line or paragraph of your story are the most critical words in the entire story.  Try out these memorable lines from famous works:

“Call me Ishmael.”  (Moby Dick)

“Lolita, light of my life, fire of my loins.” (Lolita)

“Happy families are all alike; every unhappy family is unhappy in its own way.” (Anna Karenina)

“It was a bright cold day in April and the clocks were striking thirteen.” (1984)

“It was the best of times, it was the worst of times.” (A Tale of Two Cities)

 

First lines and paragraphs have numerous functions but none are more important than grabbing the reader’s attention right away and sucking them into the story. Here are some of the main purposes of a good first line:

1. Hook or intrigue the reader.  The reader asks “What’s going on here?”
2. Set the stage and tone of the story.  Is it a mystery?  A comedy?  Action adventure?
3. Build the foundations for later conflict.  Who, what, when and where?
4. Indicate who’s telling the story.  Whose story is this?

In creating a memorable and riveting first line, ask yourself this: what are you trying to achieve?  Is it suspense?  A unique sense of place?  Are you trying to make a philosophical point?  Detail a character attribute?  Maybe the character is kind or impulsive or happy-go-lucky.  Show this early on, in a first line or paragraph.

Here’s a first line from my sf short story “Second Sun,” now available in my collection of short works called Elliptical Galaxies:

“Not everyone was happy about having a second Sun.” 

What comes out of this first line?  That there is a second Sun, whatever that means.  That somebody’s not happy about it.  Makes you wonder why some are not happy.  A certain amount of conflict and intrigue is implied here.  Perhaps this is not the best first line ever created but it points in the right direction.  It makes you want to know more.

How do you go about hooking or intriguing your reader or generating questions in the reader’s mind?  You want the reader to ask these questions about what he’s reading:

1. What do I have to do to get my questions answered?  You have to read on.
2. Why should I care? (this involves creating empathy for your character)
3. What do I gain from going on?  Satisfying curiosity, validating or proving out my suspicions, seeing how the character gains his goal or gets his comeuppance.

Spend some time or thought on your first line or paragraph.  What intrigues you?  Try it out on your reader.

As in life, so it is in storytelling.  You only get one shot to make a first impression.  Make it a memorable one.

The next post to The Word Shed comes on February 10.  In this post, I’ll look at some idea for how writers create memorable characters that readers can empathize with.

See you then.

Phil B.

 

 

Post #200 January 20 2020

“Recap of Year 2019”

Today, I provide a summary of writing and publishing results for calendar year 2019. 

In general, 2019 was a great year for me, in publishing terms.  Following is a breakdown of downloads from all sources (reported via Smashwords.com) for all my online titles.

Total net downloads for 2019 = 24,042

Total cumulative downloads for all titles since I first went online = 42,636

Downloads for Tales of the Quantum Corps = 9454

Downloads for Quantum Troopers = 21,382

Downloads for The Farpool Stories = 6961

Downloads for Time Jumpers = 1838

Downloads for alternate history titles (3) = 2602

All others = 7360

Several points should be made about the above numbers.  First, note that Quantum Troopers is half of my total downloads for all titles.  This series has and continues to be pretty successful.  It doesn’t take a genius to see that, gee, maybe I should do more of this.

Toward that end, a new series which continues Quantum Troopers begins with availability on February 7, 2020.  It’s called Quantum Troopers Return (clever, no?). Unlike all my previous titles, this series and all new uploads this year will come at a small price.  I’m anticipating setting the price of QSR at $0.99.  We’ll see what affect, if any, this has on downloads.

In addition to the above series, I have started a new science fiction novel, entitled Monument, which I anticipate will be available probably in late summer 2020.  Again, this title will come with a small (as yet undetermined) price.

I also continue to work in the medium of short stories, novelettes and novellas.  As these are collected, look for a new collection coming in the next 2 years.  I have just recently uploaded a new collection of short works entitled Elliptical Galaxies (on January 17), now available from the Smashwords store and other fine ebook retailers. 

This recent collection and all existing titles which are currently free will remain free.  That seems only fair to me.

I have recently gotten some feedback from reviews and readers that they would like to see more stories set in the Farpool universe.  While, I don’t have any specific stories planned or outlined, such a development is not out of the question.  Bringing more Farpool stories to you won’t happen in 2020 but I am considering it and there is decent chance such stories could begin to appear in 2021 or later.  Stay tuned.

Finally, I really appreciate any feedback, on this blog or in reviews and other means.  I do not currently have a Facebook account but that is another development in the works.  Look for something in the latter part of 2020 along with an updated web site.

Many thanks to all of you who have waited patiently for new stories from my feverish brain and thanks for all the downloads and reviews.  The Word Shed will plug along in this new year with more posts about what it means to work as a writer in 2020 and more ideas about how we can improve our craft and pull in even more readers.

The next post to The Word Shed comes on February 3.  In this post, I’ll look at how writers hook readers and drag them in with killer first lines and paragraphs.

See you then.

Phil B.

 

 

Post #199 January 20 2020

“Characters, Characters, Characters”

Today, we conclude our study of good storytelling practices with Point #10, which is all about characters. 

Even if you have a plot-driven story, your characters are what make a story really shine. A bland or passive protagonist makes for a boring story. Interesting and unique characters are memorable, if not timeless, even when relegated to smaller roles. Go the extra mile to give each character distinction, depth, and history. Consider writing character bios for each member of your cast and see if it gives you further insight into how to portray them.

Let’s look at some of the details.

1. Remember that readers live vicariously through your characters.  It’ll be easier for them to identify with a character if you’ve done your homework and made the character seem real to them.  But the devil is in the details.  Don’t spend so much time describing the character and his or her background that you forget to tell the story.  Perhaps the best way to remember this is to remind yourself that character is best revealed through action and how the character responds to the challenges he faces trying to achieve his goal. 
2. In developing your character(s), strive for the unique and memorable.  What sets this person apart from others?  Why should I care about what happens to this character?  A unique and memorable character is a little different, a bit off-beat, perhaps, displaying attributes such as physical characteristics or attitudes or a manner of speaking that sticks in your memory. Toward that end, one way to do this is to—
3. Recall from your own life people you have known who really stick out.  I remember my senior-year typing class teacher in high school.  One: she was black (unusual in Atlanta, GA in the late sixties).  Two: she was extremely friendly and encouraging.  Three: (most important) she knew I was smitten with a girl in the class and pestered me to ask her to the prom. Her name was Miss Simms.  I recall her fondly even today for all these reasons. 
   Ask yourself this: why is James Bond so memorable?  Or Harry Potter?  Or Tarzan or Tom Swift, Jr?  They are well described.  They act consistently across a number of stories.  With series characters, all the author has to do to invoke a character is mention a few traits, just a few words…”shaken, not stirred,” for example.  We remember these characters because they are well-drawn, they are different in engaging ways and unique in their outlook on life, not to mention in their actions in the stories.   
4. How much detail should you put in your story?  I strongly recommend writing character bios for your main characters.  You don’t have to use every single word or incident from the bio in your story but at least if Og and Grog both have blond hair and moles on their left cheeks, you’ll be consistent in how they’re described.  Readers notice that sort of thing.  Even better, some times in the process of developing a character and writing a short bio, plot points will jump out at you and suggest ways of steering the story that you might not have considered.
5. Here’s an example from a science fiction novel called Monument I’m writing now that illustrates what I’m saying:   
   Octavio Morales Patron
   Age: 50-ish
   Height: 5’9”
   Weight: 285 lbs
   Hair: Bald
   Face: Olive complexion, round and red, splotchy with nanoderm patches that aren’t working
   Other Distinguishing Features:  huffy, wheezing kind of breath; crushing hand grip; small slits for eyes, lost in extra folds of fat around the eyes; smile that vacillates between a smirk and a sneer.
    
   A Short Biography:
   Octavio Morales Patron (aka O.P. or Octo) fab lord, scope dealer and smuggler, scoopship fleet operator and shipping magnate, transmuting plant owner, terreta developer and influence peddler in the halls of the InFed Council.  Patron is the one who gives Dugay the commission for the Outer Ring project.
   Many words could be used to describe Patron: larger than life, boisterous, rambunctious, loud, obnoxious, annoying.  All of them would be true.  Patron lives aboard a luxurious personal terreta called Zanzibar, orbiting in a cycler orbit between Earth, Venus, and Mars.  It is a pleasure palace worthy of Kublai Khan, whose history has often fascinated Patron and whom Patron often fashions himself after.  He sometimes thinks of himself as a latter-day 23^rd century Khan.
   Patron’s initial fortune came from his father Julio, an early sunpower investor.  One of Julio’s legacies was to will ownership of several sunpower stations to his children.  OP has a sister Eugenia and a younger brother Oscar (now deceased).  He owns ten sunpower stations—known locally as the Sunflower Group—which beam power to customers all over InFed.  Most of the Sunflower stations are inside Mercury orbit.  These stations are the source of his original wealth.
   OP was born on Earth itself, in Buenos Aires, to Julio and Constanza Morales Patron, in the year 2195 CE.  But as a child, he was relocated to the family terreta Cordoba in halo orbit around Earth-Moon L3 and this is where he grew up.  Patron is a creature of space, or at least non-Earth and now can no longer return to Earth due to its powerful gravity well.
   Today, Patron’s most lucrative business after sunpower is smuggling, something which InFed tries to control but mostly winks at, for OP has supporters even among SpaceGuard and Frontier Corps.  His smuggling includes scope, illegal fabs (nanobotic fabrication systems) and many contraband goods to a variety of settlements especially along the borderlands of InFed, along the inner ring of the asteroid belt. 
   Another source of wealth for Patron are his multiple shipping lines, notably the Patronic Line, consisting of dozens of scoopships, dredges, transmuters (factory ships which take elemental materials and use nuclear reactions to transmute them to other elements), container ships and even a small cruise line for high-end tourists (Cabalgada or Cavalcade).  He is a powerful fleet operator across the spaceways of InFed with interests everywhere, one of the biggest, and this gives him great influence inside InFed, especially with the Secretary-General and the General Assembly.  His own personal cruiser Bolivar is a scoopship extensively modified to serve as a sort of floating office for flitting around his varied interests from one end of InFed to the other.
   One of OP’s later businesses is to finance the development and sale of dozens of terretas all over InFed, making him sort of a land developer and which is the initial impetus for the idea of the Outer Ring…to outflank the Concordance and ensure a long-lasting supply chain of materials and resources for InFed well into the future.  His latest project is a sort of planned development of terretas called Elysium, mostly located in orbit around the Sun near the Sun-Mars L5 point, trailing Mars but easily reachable from many points.
   OP wants a name architect-developer for the Outer Ring (so does InFed) and that’s why he pursues Philippe Dugay so assiduously.
   All of these business interests give Patron a strong voice inside InFed government, and he uses that influence to buy politicians all the time.  It doesn’t hurt that he has had off and on relations with one Katerina Lind, daughter of InFed founder Arthur Lind and an early sunpower developer himself.
   OP has been married and divorced five times and they were (in chronological order): Ria, Khamis, Selene, Marguerite, and Fumiko.  He currently has two mistresses Eva (who lives with him at Zanzibar and Dolores, who resides at Copernicus City, the Moon.  They both know of each other and have communicated remotely at times.  They aren’t exactly married to OP but the relationships are more than just friendships. Both want to become pregnant by OP to strengthen their hold on him but OP is notoriously careful about this. 
   OP views his Outer Ring project and his association with Philippe Dugay (if he can be convinced) as the capstone project of his career, one which will cement the names of both for all history, for Patron has become increasingly concerned about his legacy.
   He is pondering letting Eva and Dolores become pregnant by him, so as to have sons to leave his empire with.
    

I don’t need to have any more details on this character to have a good feel about what type of person he is.  And I only do this for major characters in my story.   With this, I have enough background on Octavio Patron to reliably and consistently sketch him out whenever I need him to show up on stage.

This concludes our brief story lab.  I hope discussing these 10 points of good storytelling practices will help you in all your future writing endeavors.

The next post to The Word Shed comes on January 27.  In this post, I’ll provide a re-cap of my writing activities and results for year 2019.

See you then.

Phil B.